Describe Map

My rainbow beach diorama

Junk mail by Prue Hilson

WALT: Write prediction for what a story might be about based
on the given keywords

One day, Lili was sick so Ana delivered the circulars on a buggy
Then, Ana pushed the brake off and the pram took off to the
streets in the town, when Ana arrived at the job the manager
was mad. “You are late! That is very bad!” shouted the
manager. Ana had worries that Lili might lose her job so she
paid money to not let that happen.

WALT: Evaluate our prediction after reading the story (junkmail)
by Prue Hilson

I give my prediction 5/10, I predicted correctly that Lili was sick
and Ana helped her get her work done.

However, I got the manager part wrong as it doesn’t link to
anything in the story.

Where am I describing?

Children and people laugh joyfully as they run and chase their friends,

Most people come at a specific time of the day.

No one comes when rain approaches.

A sea of unprotected faces rub on white cream as it fades into skin due to
the blazing sun above them.

Since many sea creatures swim here often, they’re in sight of humans.

The water will sprint across the shore as it slides back to its original place.

Feet will lay on soft, golden sand as it climbs up and between toes.

Be careful, because the big wave of natural disasters might occur any
minute when staying at this place.

People also bring things like mats, towels, umbrellas, toys and balls to enjoy
their time at this place.

Or they may even bounce the volleyball over the net, trying to avoid it from
falling on the sand.

The clothing they bring to this place is different to everyday outfits you
wear and feel comfortable with.

Some may even come to this place with hats or sunglasses for extra
protection encase the sunscreen wasn’t enough.

      Learning how to swim is a key thing to know in the big crowd of water,
it's dangerous if people are clueless when in deep waters.

Don't fear though, there will always be a person on watch for drowning or
other emergencies.

To alert the watcher, parents scream for help if their child is in an alarming
situation.

This is where people go surfing in the big waves that slowly grow over you.

The shining sun warms your wet head that has been splashed with water as it
dries the liquid on your head.

Where am I describing?

My beach art

My speech judging sheet

Speech Judging Sheet

Name: Dorothy      

Topic: Children should be able to bring pets to school                

Category	Main Points	Self Assessment
		Low                                         High
		1           2 3           4 5
Structure	My speech was organised logically into paragraphs, with an effective introduction and a conclusion.	3
Delivery	I used some gestures, stood still and made eye contact with my audience. My voice was clear and loud.  I didn’t speak too quickly or too slowly.	1
Content	My speech had a message and was original, interesting and relevant to the audience.	1
Language	I used ‘powerful’ words in my speech.  I also included some language features (eg repetition, alliteration, similes etc)	2
Time	My speech was between 2 ½ and 3 ½ minutes long.	3

Next time I need to

Work on controlling my nervousness and talk slower. Have more eye contact and morre hand gestures

Teacher Comment

Well done Dorothy, you were well prepared and your speech was well written.  Your next step is to slow down so that your voice is clearer and it is easier to understand what you are saying.

My speech judging sheet

Speech Judging Sheet

Name: Dorothy      

Topic: Children should be able to bring pets to school                

Category	Main Points	Self Assessment
		Low                                         High
		1           2 3           4 5
Structure	My speech was organised logically into paragraphs, with an effective introduction and a conclusion.	3
Delivery	I used some gestures, stood still and made eye contact with my audience. My voice was clear and loud.  I didn’t speak too quickly or too slowly.	1
Content	My speech had a message and was original, interesting and relevant to the audience.	1
Language	I used ‘powerful’ words in my speech.  I also included some language features (eg repetition, alliteration, similes etc)	2
Time	My speech was between 2 ½ and 3 ½ minutes long.	3

Next time I need to

Work on controlling my nervousness and talk slower. Have more eye contact and morre hand gestures.

Teacher Comment

Well done Dorothy, you were well prepared and your speech was well written.  Your next step is to slow down so that your voice is clearer and it is easier to understand what you are saying.